Some artistic shots included which help to establish tone at the start but the action becomes a little difficult to follow as the piece progresses.
Suggestions for enhancements/improvements: • End of the first shot (as the camera turns) – is the sound of the clip still on? I can hear the camera movement. • Credit text needs addressing – think carefully about fonts, colours and entry style. You also need a production logo and perhaps some black screen + text + sound before the first shot (to help establish tone/atmosphere further) • Sound/music with title text? • Shot of Annabelle and Samah needs to be cut sooner • Don’t use blur transitions – straight cuts are more professional • CONTINUITY ISSUE: we see Annabelle send a text and continue walking. THEN we cut to a blank phone screen and the text eventually comes through. You need to cross cut between the shots to give the illusion no time has passed • Editing makes sequence of events very confusing – Annabelle goes into a classroom and we then cut to a dark interior • Murder scene – not exciting enough. Little suspense is built. Who is being killed? Hard to care about this person. • Music doesn’t work. Music/sound needs CAREFUL consideration and should enhance the action not distract from it
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Some artistic shots included which help to establish tone at the start but the action becomes a little difficult to follow as the piece progresses.
Suggestions for enhancements/improvements:
• End of the first shot (as the camera turns) – is the sound of the clip still on? I can hear the camera movement.
• Credit text needs addressing – think carefully about fonts, colours and entry style. You also need a production logo and perhaps some black screen + text + sound before the first shot (to help establish tone/atmosphere further)
• Sound/music with title text?
• Shot of Annabelle and Samah needs to be cut sooner
• Don’t use blur transitions – straight cuts are more professional
• CONTINUITY ISSUE: we see Annabelle send a text and continue walking. THEN we cut to a blank phone screen and the text eventually comes through. You need to cross cut between the shots to give the illusion no time has passed
• Editing makes sequence of events very confusing – Annabelle goes into a classroom and we then cut to a dark interior
• Murder scene – not exciting enough. Little suspense is built. Who is being killed? Hard to care about this person.
• Music doesn’t work. Music/sound needs CAREFUL consideration and should enhance the action not distract from it